Perfect Angel Who Is The Actual Treasure Of My Heart

in the dream I don’t tell anyone you put your head in my lap

oh hbo the television network that you are

immortal companions

a thin veil

But I see her in the back of my mind…

all the time.

You know what’s a million times more exciting than a random plot twist that comes out of nowhere? A plot twist that was foreshadowed by things you didn’t realize were foreshadowing at first. Nothing makes me go absolutely bananas like the feeling of “oh FUCK…[seemingly unrelated thing] WAS FORESHADOWING”

Editing Junk Words

There are words that (most of the time) are best to be left out of or changed in your draft. So CTRL+F your draft and get into the nitty gritty!*

*what you keep or change is up to you and your writing style. :)

Very

Would you rather someone say you’re very good or that you’re AMAZING. Changing “very ____” to one word usually hypes it up and gets the point across better. Check out my list of alternatives!

Just

Good to keep some in 1st Person especially, but it can saturate your writing very quickly. So be careful! 

Really

Can be replaced by alternatives of “very ___” in a lot of cases. More likely to appear and seem natural in 1st Person, but you do you.

Said

Not always the bad guy, but if you need something new, check out my alternatives for “said”!

In order

“In order to achieve this plot…” can be “To achieve this plot…” and perform the same effect, if not more effectively. 

That

A typically casual and informal filler word. If you don’t need it or don’t feel it fits, cut it!

Quite

Works best in dialogue, not really anywhere else.

Seemed

This is pretty boring and lacks intricacy IMO. Check out my alternatives for “seemed”!

Thing

Not always a junk word, but it can be. Use your discretion. 

Utilize

“Utilize” is a more pretentious version of “use”. But if it’s put in a pretentious character’s dialogue/narration and the shoe fits… utilize it.

Got

“She got bananas” is way less interesting than “she bought bananas” or “she stole bananas” or “she harvested bananas”. The word “got” cuts out an opportunity for details/characterization. Replacing it lessens repetition as well.

Went

Shares similarities with “seemed” and “got”. It kills a chance for more detail. Check out my alternatives for “went”!

These bitches are GAY!!!!!!!

JINKSIE!!!! My dear sweet girl